Wednesday, October 17, 2012

Close The Book - Trifecta


This weeks Trifecta Challenge the third definition, which, in this case, is fairly specific.

BLACK
3: dressed in black

Close The Book

Satin and lace splinters the air
a toreador’s cape, a suicidal Paso Doble,
dancing with the unseen,
alone on the hilltop – fearless and free.

Dressed in black, she closed the book. 

19 comments:

  1. I love the imagery here, and the photo goes along with it so well. Even more, I love your word choices: "Satin and lace splinters the air" is a beautiful phrase. Small nitpick: grammatically speaking, wouldn't it be "satin and lace SPLINTER", not "SPLINTERS"?

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    1. Well, look at that, I fixed my "reply" not working issue. Thanks again for the grammar suggestion. I love critique.

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  2. I'm totally on the same page with Flippa -- I loved that Paso Doble line, and the image of satin and lace splintering the air comes across perfectly with that. This was well done!

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    1. Thanks Brian. My Dancing With The Stars addiction coming through. :)
      dk

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  3. This is beautiful! Thank you for stopping by my blog and your thoughtful comment. Love your blog.

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    1. Thanks Debra. Trying desperately to get some discipline in writing.
      dk

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  4. Love that first line :3 Short and sweet.

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  5. I too love that bit about the suicidal Paso Doble; really great images here.

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  6. enjoyed this nice imagery. I think splinters is okay - the s makes the poem "sound" better more like satin and lace splintering- i imagine them part of one piece of clothing :-)

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  7. A good book can take us to so many different places. I like how that last line draws us back to reality. (And I wouldn't have noticed the person in the picture without the story!)

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  8. Vivid imagery! The ending is abrupt, yet filled with so much more than what is said.

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  9. Thanks for linking up this week! I love this, and I love the grammar debate above. Your poem is a little too short, though. Our minimum is 33 words. :-( We're just trying to pull a little extra out of you. Hope you'll come back for the weekend and bring us a few extra.

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  10. OMG-didn't even re-count after edits. Sheesh.

    Yep, next time. Thanks
    dk

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  11. Volatile and disturbing. Nice work.

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  12. Counting with the edits kills so much time every week!!!

    I love the name of the dance, which tells you I'm a DWTS freak too ... I really love the way the whole story feels black in such a yummy way.

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  13. That was great. It reminds me of something that was written by a poet who later committed suicide. I wish I could recall her name. Now I have to go look - just a sec - it was Alfonsina Storni. Google her bio - interesting.

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