You take a knife, you use it to cut the bread, so you'll have strength to work; you use it to shave, so you'll look nice for your lover; on discovering her with another, you use it to cut out her lying heart.He uses one object, a knife, to flesh out a character and to tell a story in a basic three-part dramatic structure. We want the same from you. Give us 33 words (exactly) that tell us three different uses for one object. But don't just tell us that a can opener can be used to 1) open cans, 2) open beer bottles and 3) break a window in case of a fire. Tell us a story, like Lead Belly did, if you can.
Only my second time working this, I've written three different pieces:
1.
She flicked the Bic
and the ritual releasing candle
glowed before the Bic torched his wretched
belongings
in the dirt firepit. Only the red
tip of a
Bic lit cigarette remained
in the blackness.
Warm water nourished the corn and tomatoes;
warm water washed away fertile earth from beneath chipped
nails,
and flowed across the bathroom floor tinged with the
blood of loneliness.
3.
Golden hair waved from windows of a red VW puttering down
Ventura highway.
It transported a collage of beaming hope across miles.
In the distance, a sienna beetle cradles the wild.
I hope they let all your takes slide into the competition. All the entries are good.
ReplyDeleteI think I liked #1 the best, though they were all good.
ReplyDeleteTook me forever to come up with one and you have THREE! All of them are excellent; vivid imagery, and really made me think. Much enjoyed these.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sandra: VIVID imagery...
ReplyDeleteI liked all of these...if I had to pick a fav, I'd go with the first :)
ReplyDeleteI liked all three but liked no. 1 the best. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteThe first one was my favorite -I loved the way it started and ended calm with absolute destruction in the middle.
ReplyDeleteAs you know, we only accept one entry per writer. I loved the picture you drew of the life of that Bic. I can still see the intermittent glow of that lit cig somewhere in the dark.
ReplyDeleteThanks for linking up this week. Be sure to come on back tomorrow for the new challenge.
sometimes the hardest thing to do is get one good one written. I write several takes (sometimes) and then the hardest thing is to pick the one to post. :) Welcome to the challenge. I look forward to reading more of your pieces.
ReplyDeleteExcellent imagery on the first - my favourtie!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]